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This is the second half of a story commissioned by
This is story is a sequel to a short story that I wrote (and was also commissioned by the same client) in 2012.
You can read it here:
Read Part 1: here
This is the second half of a story commissioned by
This is story is a sequel to a short story that I wrote (and was also commissioned by the same client) in 2012.
You can read it here:
The Creature of Lake Silver StreamLaney hated late summer. For the past 6 years, her parents sent her off to Camp Silver Stream for two weeks of fun-filled activities. Worse, the camp was girls-only, and the closest boys’ camp was a Christian place. Not surprisingly, the two camps did not participate in any inter-camp group activities. Laney resented the camp and everything about it. Silver Stream was more like a resort for spoiled rich girls, and she resented the snobby girls who looked down on her. Her family might not have been as ridiculously well-off as the other girls’, but they were far from poor, and she didn’t deserve to be treated like a trailer park trash.
Luckily, having turned 17 earlier this summer, Laney would be in the senior girl’s group, and with it came the privilege of more freedom to go about as she pleased. This was convenient, because Laney planned a special surprise for the camp’s final day, its grand finale talent show.
As posh as the camp was, it was situated
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I like the story quality of this piece and the twists you threw in. I'm not sure how the ghost of a croc was able to physically kill and eat Natalie, but I guess it's ok not to waste a lot of space with that, just like Star Trek never explained how someone could teleport without collapsing dead on the other side. It's fiction, and reality is boring 
. Someone wanting to read of hot girls getting wolfed down might be disappointed that only one hot girl was eaten, but I think that's fine when you're looking for something deeper than mindless t&a. I'd say it was good, also because it gave me insight into the minds of the cold-hearted (I mean your characters, hopefully not you ).
. Someone wanting to read of hot girls getting wolfed down might be disappointed that only one hot girl was eaten, but I think that's fine when you're looking for something deeper than mindless t&a. I'd say it was good, also because it gave me insight into the minds of the cold-hearted (I mean your characters, hopefully not you ).